Everyday Stories: On the Subway


So here’s my first post for Everyday Stories. I’ll be taking something that happened last night on my way home from work.

The Event: An old man is on the subway, where he was sitting next to a woman (she was on his left). The woman got up right before her stop and said “Excuse me” to the man since his legs were in the way. The man moved his legs a bit, thinking it was enough but the woman still couldn’t pass through. The man suddenly got quite angry and started mumbling as he further moved his legs to make room for the woman. As he mumbled angrily, he was giving this woman a killer death stare.

Okay. So when I saw this happen, I immediately thought that this old man was being a jerk. To me, the woman really didn’t have much space to move around if she needed to reach the doors. She could’ve been rude and walked through the old man’s legs, which probably would’ve pissed him off, too. I initially thought that this man was being lazy and inconsiderate, but then I started thinking: why did that woman bother him so much. And this is when I started thinking about potential plot lines….

The Story Ideas:

  • Before he got on the subway, a 50-year old man got into the worst fight with his wife of 40 years. She declined treatment for her cancer and he can’t change her mind. He was taking the subway to visit his son, who had cut off ties with his mother since he was 18. This old man thinks reuniting them will change his wife’s mind and save her life.
  • An old man on the subway causes a commotion when he starts yelling in rage at the woman sitting beside him. The woman tries to calm him down but he just gets worse. It turns out that he’s her father, who she’s been taking care of for the past three years. She’s very close to reaching her tipping point – her life has been falling apart since she started caring for her sick father.
  • A woman finds herself running late while on the subway. Just as she was about to get off her stop, the man sitting beside her prevents her from getting out of the subway car. She is livid! Because she didn’t get off her stop, she has missed a very important meeting – one that would’ve changed her life forever. This meeting was the last task she needed to complete to get her life back.

These are basically the ideas I wrote down during last night’s commute. Like I mentioned in my last post, I didn’t want to edit myself. The point of Everyday Stories is that I just write whatever idea I can think of during the moment without judging how great or crappy it is.

So what about you? What story ideas come to your mind when you read about the old man and the woman on the subway? I’d love to read them!

  • http://dslrhd.com Adriel Brunson

    Waiting. Always the waiting.

    I hear the subway coming but my legs feel like rubber.

    That damned “I need another test to be sure…” doctor.

    Waiting until Thursday for another visit across town just to find out.

    “I’m sorry, I wish there was something I could do. Is there someone…”

    Oh, there was someone. But she left. Left me waiting and waiting.

    I step through the door and collapse. Thank God there’s no one else near me.

    “Maybe six months. Maybe…”

    Everything gets blurry. I don’t remember much but the train starting and stopping. People coming and going on the other end of the car.

    Then someone sits next to me. She’s not looking at me but I can feel it.

    I feel her pity. I feel her pushing me away. I feel her accusing me for not getting a checkup earlier. Like it would have made any difference.

    The train stops. She stands up and mutters something.

    Why the hell doesn’t she just go back the way she came?

    I move my legs but the pain shoots up my spine.

    I look at her, wanting to scream at her, wanting her to admit that she did it all on purpose.

    I manage to pull my legs up some more and she stumbles by.

    God, I don’t know how much more of this I can take.

    I catch a young dark haired woman looking at me like I’m some kind of jerk.

    I turn away, close my eyes, push away the pain, push everything away.

  • http://biancafiloteo.com Bianca Filoteo

    Wow, this is awesome. I enjoyed reading every single line, which I thought was refreshing – you could’ve written these in a few paragraphs, but you didn’t. The last 5 lines are my faves.

    Thanks for sharing this!

  • http://www.iphoneincanada.ca Gary

    Your story ideas remind me of the scenes in Date Night when Tina Fey and Steve Carell make up stories about couples in the restaurant!

    My plot line: The old man was sooo close to solving something in his head, and right when he was about to solve whatever puzzle/problem, he was broken out of his trance by the woman. That resulted in his dagger-like death stare.

  • http://biancafiloteo.com Bianca Filoteo

    Thanks for sharing your plot line! I didn’t even think about that possibility of the old man being so focused on solving something. If we were to make it really important for him to find that solution (where the takes could be life or death), that could definitely lead him to giving a death stare (or maybe even something else).

    ps. I love both Tina Fey and Steve Carell…I really should watch that movie already! I’d love see that restaurant scene that you mentioned. I heard that they did a lot of improv in that scene, so I’m sure they had many takes to choose from.

  • http://www.corruptcamel.com C. Camel

    I love your story lines! The subway is full of interesting, bizarre people. Who knows what they’re thinking! My question to you is, in the first story line, a 50 year old man gets in the worst fight with his wife of 40 years, so does that mean he got married when he was 10 years old!? Is this what the fight was about? I must know!

  • http://biancafiloteo.com Bianca Filoteo

    Ok, I confess: I wasn’t paying much attention to the details when I was writing that haha But now you got me thinking, why NOT have them get married before puberty? It’d make an interesting story, right?

  • Anonymous

    So I love this! I do this all the time! More please: )